I am to be - Kalai Selvi Arivalagan (open ebook .TXT) 📗

if instead of coming out and describing being perfect if there is another way to show it.

There is a question at the end of stanza five that ends with a dash, but I think that perhaps it might be more poignant if it ended like a normal question, with a question mark.

 

Other Thoughts

I like how the word sham was brought back around. It seems to play an important role in this poem as it speaks of what others perceive the narrator to be. I don't like name calling, but the reference in itself describes how the opinions of others can reflect on one's self worth and the role it plays in making them feel important, needed, and wanted. I wonder what kinds of things people say to others that is, unbeknownst to them, taken to the grave.

 

My Opinion

I appreciate what you wrote, and although it's not my favorite style, I can see it for what it is and appreciate it none-the-less. I think that the questions that this provokes is well worth the read, especially the ending. Thank you for sharing this.

 

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Publication Date: 05-15-2012

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